14 Apr 2013

# 14

Depending on Tess Magpie who flies in way past noon,
a number 14 poem may appear here soon...
so watch this space
'tis no disgrace...

See you this afternoon?
 

Afternoon is here, and so am I again! With thanks to Tess and the artist Kuzma Petrov-Vodin at The Mag. And here is an etheree for the real #14 of NaPoRiMo.


Walking Out on Sunday Afternoon

Prim,
proper,
the courting
couple's meeting
is awkward. They sit
apart, each self contained;
she, gazing way off yonder;
he, leaning sideways, studying
the composition of her profile...
both feeling on top of the world today.

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25 comments:

  1. DCW14 April 2013 at 15:17

    How well you have captured the feeling!

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  2. Sueann14 April 2013 at 16:24

    Oh how they pine and enjoy the moment!
    Hugs
    SueAnn

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  3. izzy14 April 2013 at 17:01

    oooh daring ending on a pun! thanks.

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  4. Sreeja14 April 2013 at 17:29

    inetersting and perfect for the picture...

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  5. Berowne14 April 2013 at 18:17

    Excellent, and such a sharp presentation...

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  6. Brother Ollie14 April 2013 at 19:05

    cool post - I need to go outside and walk

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  7. Anonymous14 April 2013 at 19:41

    A great description of this couple. I'm not sure it will turn out well.

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  8. Doctor FTSE14 April 2013 at 20:38

    A fine example of the etheree form.

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  9. Kathe W.14 April 2013 at 21:02

    a lovely beginning....

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  10. Charleen14 April 2013 at 23:35

    An explanation as to their seemingly strange behavior.

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  11. Unknown15 April 2013 at 02:27

    ahhh...the awkward mating ritual of the homo sapien

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  12. Trellissimo15 April 2013 at 09:52

    The cynic in me suggests the only way left to go is downhill! Haha! Sorry. :)

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  13. Dave King15 April 2013 at 09:56

    Telling it as it is - exactly! Bravo.

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  14. Nanka15 April 2013 at 11:12

    Spring, 1935 by Kuzma Petrov-Vodin .....and that was how it was supposed to be, long ago in 1935 there but quaintly it is still so here and quite often one comes across these awkward couples!!

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  15. Helen15 April 2013 at 17:05

    You aced the form ... and the interpretation of the painting.

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  16. Lyn15 April 2013 at 20:19

    So clever..and who'll make the first move??

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  17. Tess Kincaid15 April 2013 at 20:32

    They literally do look as if they're on the top of the world...

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  18. Helena15 April 2013 at 21:06

    I liked how you built your wonderfully open piece to format in one corner!

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  19. Other Mary16 April 2013 at 01:46

    Excellent - and I second what Rene said!

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  20. Silent Otto 16 April 2013 at 15:25

    Tis all very conservative, you sense

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  21. Anonymous16 April 2013 at 18:24

    I love the form of your poem and you really captured the feeling of the painting!

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  22. 21 Wits17 April 2013 at 02:29

    ...and their courtship turns quickly to romance and marriage and several babies in a carriage! Very nice!

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  23. gautami tripathy17 April 2013 at 17:46

    Excellent writing. Loved this!!

    patterns don't free us

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  24. Anonymous18 April 2013 at 04:41

    Very lovely poem.

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  25. susan m hinckley21 April 2013 at 02:29

    Loved the form of this! Suited the prompt so nicely somehow. Well done.

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