Sunday, April 14

# 14

Depending on Tess Magpie who flies in way past noon,
a number 14 poem may appear here soon...
so watch this space
'tis no disgrace...

See you this afternoon?
 

Afternoon is here, and so am I again! With thanks to Tess and the artist Kuzma Petrov-Vodin at The Mag. And here is an etheree for the real #14 of NaPoRiMo.


Walking Out on Sunday Afternoon

Prim,
proper,
the courting
couple's meeting
is awkward. They sit
apart, each self contained;
she, gazing way off yonder;
he, leaning sideways, studying
the composition of her profile...
both feeling on top of the world today.

25 comments:

  1. How well you have captured the feeling!

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  2. Oh how they pine and enjoy the moment!
    Hugs
    SueAnn

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  3. oooh daring ending on a pun! thanks.

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  4. inetersting and perfect for the picture...

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  5. Excellent, and such a sharp presentation...

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  6. cool post - I need to go outside and walk

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  7. A great description of this couple. I'm not sure it will turn out well.

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  8. A fine example of the etheree form.

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  9. An explanation as to their seemingly strange behavior.

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  10. ahhh...the awkward mating ritual of the homo sapien

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  11. The cynic in me suggests the only way left to go is downhill! Haha! Sorry. :)

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  12. Telling it as it is - exactly! Bravo.

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  13. Spring, 1935 by Kuzma Petrov-Vodin .....and that was how it was supposed to be, long ago in 1935 there but quaintly it is still so here and quite often one comes across these awkward couples!!

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  14. You aced the form ... and the interpretation of the painting.

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  15. So clever..and who'll make the first move??

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  16. They literally do look as if they're on the top of the world...

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  17. I liked how you built your wonderfully open piece to format in one corner!

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  18. Excellent - and I second what Rene said!

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  19. Tis all very conservative, you sense

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  20. I love the form of your poem and you really captured the feeling of the painting!

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  21. ...and their courtship turns quickly to romance and marriage and several babies in a carriage! Very nice!

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  22. Loved the form of this! Suited the prompt so nicely somehow. Well done.

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