A
dancer
stretches out,
clasping fingers
around aching foot,
pleading with tense muscles
to delve for more energy,
willing them to obey her wish,
that the dance may continue to flow
in an unbroken river of movement.
dancer
stretches out,
clasping fingers
around aching foot,
pleading with tense muscles
to delve for more energy,
willing them to obey her wish,
that the dance may continue to flow
in an unbroken river of movement.
For Writer's Island Day #23 I have chosen to write an etheree. Beginning with one, the lines increase by one syllable each time, to reach a total of ten in the tenth line.
Late Edition Extra! Now it's afternoon, and more words needed to be written, so here's a Haiku for Saturday.
Late Edition Extra! Now it's afternoon, and more words needed to be written, so here's a Haiku for Saturday.
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The day holds love-light,
residue of the morning.
A perfect pleasure.
residue of the morning.
A perfect pleasure.
The dancer's flow may be interrupted, but your etheree flows nicely.
ReplyDeleteVery smooth and descriptive, indeed; and fine artwork.
ReplyDeleteYet another form unknown to me...thanks! And, well done. Love the sketch, you can almost feel the pain by looking at it.
ReplyDeleteEnjoyed that, and in purely coincidental fashion, my love of old films has just had me watch The Red Shoes, so most apt.
ReplyDeleteJinksy, your poem speaks to me, I was a ballet dancer from grade school through high school. I love the form, too. I see we were on the same wavelength:) Is that your artwork? I love it!
ReplyDeletePamela
I like "Tension" - the way it builds, and you made all the line breaks meaningful, which I find difficult in syllabic poems.
ReplyDeleteI love learning these new forms. I think I've tried this without knowing it's name. :)I like the way yours glides write into the next line; much like a dancer.
ReplyDeleteBy the way, thank you so much for the info on how to put my link on here. I'm pretty excited about the new knowledge and have been using it. Here goes:
Quit Doing What We Do
Love the Etheree, the drawing, your words express so much more. Now that you have cleared up form and explanation, I feel satisfied. I created something else althogether. Want to suggest a name for it, lol. Thank you Jinksy,
ReplyDeleteElizabeth
Very nice. I t reminds me of a RUSH song (from me, that's big compliment). I love the look of the Etheree too.
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