27 Nov 2011

Walled In?

Phantom shapes
crowd our awareness,
supplicants
who beg for
attention. "Please acknowledge
this, our existence?"

Translucent,
these ghostly beings
murmuring
in whispers
are an insistent army
who cannot find peace.

So our thoughts
seek recognition,
as they pass
through our minds,
clamouring to be noticed
until we pay heed.

This was sparked by today's Mapie Tales' photo by Christine Donnier-Valentin. Thanks, Tess!
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42 comments:

  1. Alice Audrey27 November 2011 at 17:20

    Sounds like some of my characters. Others are a bit less translucent.

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  2. anthonynorth27 November 2011 at 17:33

    You rose above the settee admirably.

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  3. Kathe W.27 November 2011 at 17:37

    great words- I love how every week we all see things so differently

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  4. Margaret27 November 2011 at 17:47

    ...as they pass through our minds!

    Very interesting, Jinksy.

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  5. Tom27 November 2011 at 17:54

    seeing shapes in the weathered patterns...ghostly!

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  6. Other Mary27 November 2011 at 18:27

    Really like this one...and the sofa certainly has become translucent!
    (S1, L6 our existence?)

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  7. Anonymous27 November 2011 at 18:39

    so many thoughts, so little paper....
    how many get discarded on the ash heap of memory?

    Old duffers like me, just fade away. ;)
    rel (http://pciyrtpy.blogspot.com/)

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  8. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis Hall27 November 2011 at 18:48

    inspirational words.

    well penned.

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  9. Laurie Kolp27 November 2011 at 19:50

    I love how you focused on a piece of the picture... I never would have noticed shapes in the wall.

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  10. Carrie Van Horn27 November 2011 at 23:03

    Inspiring indeed Penny...i love this! :-)

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  11. Scarlet28 November 2011 at 00:07

    I like your poem's interpretation....you have an eye for the details ~

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  12. izzy28 November 2011 at 03:08

    I saw somethings there too!

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  13. CHummelKornell28 November 2011 at 04:10

    Wonderful approach, you looked beyond the color to the stains (ghosts) upon the walls. Well done!

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  14. Zoe28 November 2011 at 05:39

    I love the parallel between the shapes and thoughts. Really nice take on the prompt.

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  15. Isabel Doyle28 November 2011 at 08:23

    reminds me of the 3 am hauntings
    great poem Jinksy

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  16. Martin28 November 2011 at 10:55

    Noticing those things that call for our attention. Nicely put.

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  17. Anonymous28 November 2011 at 12:27

    Again looking beyond the obvious - nice work Penny

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  18. Other Mary28 November 2011 at 12:58

    You're welcome for the previous comment. I'm never sure if it's appropriate to put something like that here or not, but I figure if it was me I'd want it. And of course you can always delete my comment and then it's just our little secret! :o)

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  19. Jinksy28 November 2011 at 13:21

    Other Mary - I love to know when I've made a boo-boo, thanks! But your reminder was so cryptic, it took a day for light to dawn! hehehe!

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  20. Anonymous28 November 2011 at 16:56

    Lovely. I really love the line of "Please acknowledge this our existence." And the spectres work so well with the idea of the brick outlines--substance there and not there. Really nice. K.

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  21. Helen28 November 2011 at 17:10

    Love how you go where others don't!

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  22. Trellissimo28 November 2011 at 17:17

    Sort of 'Writing's on the wall'? LOL

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  23. Lolamouse28 November 2011 at 19:10

    Everyone wants to be acknowledge, eh? Even those little thoughts keep pecking away until they are noticed!

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  24. Berowne28 November 2011 at 19:27

    A very fresh, inventive, striking response to the prompt.

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  25. Brandee Shafer28 November 2011 at 20:08

    This is why we should all carry a notebook 24/7! Well done.

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  26. Brian Miller28 November 2011 at 20:23

    all walled up...like poes foe...bet he still walked his mind wel after the screams stopped...

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  27. Suko28 November 2011 at 20:23

    Very creative and wonderful! I like how you customized the photo as well.

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  28. JBinford-Bell28 November 2011 at 22:23

    Dumped the sofa, huh?

    Like what you did with the wall.

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  29. Lyn29 November 2011 at 02:04

    You see so much...especially the "clamoring to be noticed"..well done..

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  30. Tumblewords:29 November 2011 at 03:32

    So very creative! Enjoyed this!

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  31. ds29 November 2011 at 05:59

    Love this. Only you would notice what's going on in the wall & make such wonderful associations. Thank you.

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  32. indiwriter29 November 2011 at 16:04

    Very imaginative take, Jinksy. So true what you say about thoughts.

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  33. Maggie30 November 2011 at 01:10

    A very different view of the prompt. I like it, I like it. : )

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  34. Sheila30 November 2011 at 03:13

    I like your poem - not the thoughts you speak of for I try to ignore them daily ;) but you have given them a bit of a voice here.

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  35. Intelliblog30 November 2011 at 07:07

    I do like your poem, Jinksy, and I also like the way your inspiration was tangential to the central point of focus of the original image. This is what is so great about all of our collective efforts every week, different inspirations from the same image. Wonderful!

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  36. Brigid O'Connor30 November 2011 at 10:03

    I like your very creative interpretation, Jinksy. We are both on the same supernatural wavelength this week:)

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  37. hyperCRYPTICal30 November 2011 at 11:33

    Clever stuff Jinksy! Excellent Mag!

    Anna :o]

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  38. Anonymous30 November 2011 at 15:51

    Dear Thingy: I love how you focused upon the wall. That wall is so impressive as is your ample imagination! Way to go! Chiccoreal

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  39. Anonymous30 November 2011 at 15:53

    er excuse me...Jinksy! Damn! I was thinking of Jinksy and Thingy was typed...blame it on...my "pause"! Your poem is marvelous J! Chiccoreal!!!

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  40. miss pie1 December 2011 at 04:47

    ... we all want acknowledgement... the unseen reflection the ghosts and shadows of our thoughts....

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  41. Anonymous3 December 2011 at 17:58

    focusing in was very original

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  42. susan m hinckley4 December 2011 at 14:21

    Love how you took just part of the photo, and the words you chose to go with it. Nice.

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