13 Nov 2011

A Plea In Two Parts

Don't look back
to a past that might have been,
when in quiet moments
you have chance to dream.
Feel no regret for words unspoken;
guard your memories, as a token
of a tender love
that's lasted through the years,
and love like that
shouldn't give you cause for tears.

Now the space between us lengthens
as I watch you turn,
and start to walk away...
I hope that my will strengthens,
for my being longs to call to you
"Please stay!"
while I watch you turn,
and start to walk away...
Don't look back,
now it's time for us to part,
for if you do,
you might see a broken heart...

Once again, Tess at Magpie Tales has got me going with her unusual choice of photograph, which eventually produced this rather odd result, for a Jinksy....
And of course, Open Link Monday ties in so well at Imaginary Garden...
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45 comments:

  1. Maggie14 November 2011 at 00:24

    It's a beautiful piece, Jinksy.

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  2. Anonymous14 November 2011 at 02:15

    Wonderful, I felt the love and the loss. Thank you!

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  3. Janet Martin14 November 2011 at 02:27

    tenderly breath-taking!

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  4. Kay L. Davies14 November 2011 at 03:07

    Lovely, Jinksy, especially the last line.

    Kay, Alberta, Canada
    An Unfittie’s Guide to Adventurous Travel

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  5. Doctor FTSE14 November 2011 at 07:43

    Quite lovely.

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  6. anthonynorth14 November 2011 at 08:29

    So very poignant.

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  7. Sueann14 November 2011 at 10:45

    Beautiful!! Enchanting!
    Hugs
    SueAnn

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  8. Christine14 November 2011 at 11:26

    A lovely post... thankyou.

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  9. izzy14 November 2011 at 14:00

    Definitely a looking back- even yearning; thanks.

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  10. Maude Lynn14 November 2011 at 14:22

    Excellent piece!

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  11. Kerry O'Connor14 November 2011 at 15:28

    Something of the first part put me in mind of Langston Hughes' style. Very fine piece of writing.

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  12. Brian Miller14 November 2011 at 16:00

    awww...yeah its best not to look back...far too much to see if you do...

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  13. Brian Miller14 November 2011 at 16:04

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  14. Brian Miller14 November 2011 at 16:05

    yeah you def dont want to look back...far too much emotion in what you may see...and false promises....

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  15. Anonymous14 November 2011 at 17:04

    Nice - I love the repetition, so reminiscent of many (metaphorical at least) backward glances before we can make our peace with 'goodbye,' and
    love like that
    shouldn't give you cause for tears.

    Great take on the prompt.

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  16. Kathe W.14 November 2011 at 17:09

    your words enabled me to see that farewell dance...nicely done.

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  17. Isabel Doyle14 November 2011 at 17:51

    you mare revealing a soft side I don'toften see Jinksy!

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  18. Jinksy14 November 2011 at 18:00

    Isabel! Why does that make me a mare?! Is it a typo, or are you jealous? *smiles*

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  19. Laurie Kolp14 November 2011 at 18:45

    So lovely, Jonksy... no need for the picture, the words said it all.

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  20. Louise14 November 2011 at 19:43

    Incredibly moving - well done you:)

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  21. Helen14 November 2011 at 20:02

    Lovely for a Jinksy I would say ...

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  22. Brandee Shafer14 November 2011 at 21:45

    I love your thinking, here, particularly that which you express at the beginning. Regret is so pointless, and it's sweet when harmless feelings stick with us over the years. Well done.

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  23. Carrie Van Horn14 November 2011 at 22:30

    Love the thoughts in this Jinksy....beautifully written! :-)

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  24. imac14 November 2011 at 22:36

    A photo with a 1000 words.

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  25. Maxwell Mead Williams Robinson Barry14 November 2011 at 22:55

    letting go is hard, but it is a relief in many senses.

    lovely magpie.

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  26. Anonymous14 November 2011 at 23:13

    You've cropped the photo so well! It brings out the longing that, of course, goes with your poem. Very lovely. K.

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  27. Chronicles of Illusions14 November 2011 at 23:31

    i love the start, and the finish - oh heck i like the middle too - great writing Jinksy

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  28. Scarlet15 November 2011 at 00:06

    a broken heart is so sad and melancholy...

    happy monday to you ~

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  29. Tumblewords:15 November 2011 at 01:50

    Well done - haunting piece.

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  30. Mary Ann Potter15 November 2011 at 02:18

    Nicely done. It brings back a very old memory from 46 years ago. No longer painful but still somewhat introspective.

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  31. Ann Grenier15 November 2011 at 02:31

    Lovely, poignant poem, Pen.

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  32. Cathy Feaster15 November 2011 at 04:06

    aww, so sad to see a broken heart. touching piece :)

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  33. Claudia15 November 2011 at 04:34

    so you have separated her from all her chairs..smiles..and good to not look back..

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  34. Intelliblog15 November 2011 at 08:41

    Beautiful and poignant. Your reworking of the image rightfully focusses in on the central character - yes the chairs are a distraction!

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  35. Dave King15 November 2011 at 11:46

    Fine writing - only thing, I thought she was looking back at me. I wanted to encourage that.

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  36. Other Mary15 November 2011 at 12:10

    That's so touching - speaks to me, and many I'm sure. And, lol I like the way you dealt with those silly chairs ;-)

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  37. Abin Chakraborty15 November 2011 at 14:44

    so true.we've all been there i guess at some point or another.lovely poem.

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  38. Brigid O'Connor15 November 2011 at 17:53

    Lovely piece, Jinksy, I hope its not from experience, no-one would dare break our Jinksy's heart!

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  39. Matt D16 November 2011 at 11:05

    Very touching and beautiful!

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  40. Lolamouse16 November 2011 at 14:17

    A beautiful and poignant piece Jinsky. Your words are truly lovely.

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  41. Emily16 November 2011 at 19:00

    This is beautiful - you captured the poignant feeling of longing in the photograph. I especially like the opening lines:

    "Don't look back
    to a past that might have been,
    when in quiet moments
    you have chance to dream."

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  42. Psychs16 November 2011 at 23:25

    Beautifully written.. "Feel no regret for words unspoken", excellent.. The words and the image, a package deal!! :))

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  43. ds17 November 2011 at 22:55

    Lovely, Jinksy. The whole story is there, in gorgeous language. Thank you.

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  44. Baishali18 November 2011 at 04:54

    such an intelligent take ... loved it :)

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  45. susan m hinckley20 November 2011 at 01:38

    Such a perfect take on the picture. Lovely!

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