Friday, November 4

Solitude

Over on d'Verse - PoetsPub, Form For All highlighted Japanese poetry. Do go and read what Lady Nyo has to say on the subject, in particular this:-
"There are basically two forms of poetry in the Man’yoshu: choka (long poem, 5-7-5-7-5-7, etc. ending in 7-7) and tanka.  (5-7-5-7-7)."
I have copied these characters which translate as 'Solitude', so here's my tanka inspired by that word..

Using memory
to trace my lover's outline,        
I am not alone
in forsaken arms of night
when my heart seeks his loving.

15 comments:

  1. hey jinksy..i didn't know you can get so romantic..smiles...enjoyed it - forsaken arms of night..tracing the lover's outlines...very nice..

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  2. how haunting and sad.. love the nostalgia

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  3. Love the heart seeking his loving:)

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  4. Very romantic. Hopefully it is just a short vacation.

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  5. Lovely, Jinksy. These forms seemed to bring out the romantic in us all.

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  6. I know and understand that longing and loneliness. When one has lost the one he/she loves memories must suffice in both remembered warmth and through the emptiness. Well done.

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  7. I feel the longing here.
    Brilliantly done!

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  8. truly beautiful - both in style and theme

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  9. wow,
    what romantic yearning,
    this is charming and smiling piece of poetry.

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  10. Love this delicately beautiful piece! The kanji are a nice touch. :)

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