17 Oct 2011

Pot Luck Tanka

A duck, out of luck,
has been strung up by his neck.
Tastes good with noodles.

Go easy on the Soy sauce-
you wouldn't want to drown him!


Once again, Tess has produced a Magpie which has brought my idiocy to the fore - sorry, folks! Remember, laughter is the best medicine. I rest my case. But now the poetry police in the shape of Doctor FTSE has pointed out that ducks are SHE's, and by golly, he's right! Who ever saw a menu with roast DRAKE? He's also improved on the whole thing, like so:-


A duck out of luck
hung by her neck tastes good with
oodles of noodles.

Go easy on the Soy sauce-
you wouldn't want to drown her!

which creates 17 syllables in deference to the start of a Tanka - 5/7/5 -  leaving the last 7/7  to incorporate the gender change! Thanks, Doc. :)
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19 comments:

  1. Isabel Doyle17 October 2011 at 12:09

    oodles of noodles is nice with duck
    quack quack

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  2. izzy17 October 2011 at 12:49

    Yummy! thanks.

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  3. christopher17 October 2011 at 12:57

    another syllable counter of the haiku persuasion...I like you dancing with the others

    Jinsky plays well with others...

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  4. Carolina17 October 2011 at 13:00

    The Doctor and Jinksy go well together too ;-)

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  5. jabblog17 October 2011 at 16:49

    . . . and they can play Ducks and Drakes, too . . .

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  6. Helen17 October 2011 at 18:00

    You always make me laugh ... duck / drake .. it's duck soup to me.

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  7. Doctor FTSE17 October 2011 at 18:03

    Carolina and Jabblog - Like Jemima Puddle and Sir Francis, I guess you mean?
    But aren't they both superb examples of the form? Now figure out whether I mean the haiku or something else . . .

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  8. Jinksy17 October 2011 at 18:25

    As long as you're not calling me 'wet', Doc? Pen the Puddle leaves a little to be desired as a nom de plume...

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  9. Brian Miller17 October 2011 at 18:42

    i think it is a little late for drowning to hurt...ha...nicely played jinksy

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  10. imac17 October 2011 at 21:23

    I'll bring the oranges.

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  11. Tumblewords:18 October 2011 at 05:31

    You'll need quackers with duck soup.

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  12. Ann Grenier18 October 2011 at 21:20

    I wonder why they string the ducks up like that?

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  13. Maxwell Mead Williams Robinson Barry19 October 2011 at 02:49

    soy sauce and noodles, love the idea of it.

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  14. Nanka19 October 2011 at 10:35

    I like the first line "A duck, out of luck," then it really does not hurt very much whatever happens next!!

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  15. Trellissimo19 October 2011 at 11:26

    Haha! I think Caddoc met a duck out of luck this week too!

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  16. Kathryn Stripling Byer19 October 2011 at 17:51

    A delight, this post, and your blog. Thanks for stopping over at mine. I'm going to have to try preparing duck soon, just to prove that it can be done.

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  17. Arnab Majumdar20 October 2011 at 07:47

    This one's funny. I know it's not really supposed to be... but it is. Is that alright? :D

    Cheers,
    Arnab Majumdar on SribbleFest.com

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  18. Helena20 October 2011 at 20:27

    Ooooh! Let him drown, love! Soy sauce is the boss in my seasoning cupboards.....lol

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  19. Anonymous23 October 2011 at 19:29

    Very clever, a lot of fun. (Even this vegetarian enjoyed.)
    K.

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