3 Jun 2015

Whatever the Weather

Today had me tapping away at the keys, after listening to IGWRT's recording of  Mr Cumberbatch reading 'Ode to a Nightingale', by Keats.  I can't compete, of course, but did feel intrigued enough to attempt to follow the rhyme scheme. We've had plenty of the 'sun versus rain' weather over the past few weeks, hence my choice of subject. 
When I have a few hours to spare, I may attempt to write more stanzas!

Capricious forces conjure sun and rain
into eternal conflict. Dark lords and bright
wage their wars as moon-tides wax and wane
throughout the universe's star drenched night,
until, by morning, rotund Earth's revolved
in deference to laws decreed long since.
Then sun-flame beams put shadow-clouds to flight,
their unshed tears like morning mists dissolved
as Helios, our hero, on his plinth
stands proud, the great defender of the light.

16 comments:

  1. Hey Jinksy--very regal language here--visually and aurally appealing. k.

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    1. I do like my poems to be a feast for the ears. :-) Thanks for your comment.

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  2. This sort of reminded me of Greek mythology with the mention of "Dark lords and bright", having a vivid and appealing sense to it :D

    A pleasurable read..!
    Lots of love,
    Sanaa

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    1. Indeed, Helios is the personification of the sun in Greek mythology!

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  3. Beautiful imagery and the tone - so grand.

    P.S. I couldn't comment using my Wordpress account. Maybe other Wordpress users who don't have a Google account can't either. Would you consider changing this?

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    1. I'll go and check my settings ...I did alter them after being besieged by an unwelcome spammer a while back.

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  4. I am most impressed - and could almost hear Mr Cumberbatch reading it!

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  5. Love the sense of mythical conflict here :-)

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    1. Can't beat a bit of Myth for magic?! :-)

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  6. An ode to the natural world and all its integral workings.

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    1. Where would we be without them?

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  7. And now for perfection, we just need Mr. Cumberbatch to read it for us :) My girls (and my son - and husband) all love Benedict.

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    1. Must be his dark brown voice that captivates one and all. :-)

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  8. This is a lovely ode to summer, I especially like how the last couplet tied it all together.

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    1. Sadly, in England, many summer days turn out to be more about rain than sunshine. *smiles*

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