14 Oct 2012

Remembering

He had done the painting of their new home soon after they married. It was to be her birthday gift; a gift that would acquire more importance as their time together stretched into the future, strengthening bonds.
She adored it, hung it in pride of place over the mantel. A day never passed without her smiling as she glanced towards the familiar image and remembered...

Now, she remembers when he was alive, and as shadows dim sunlight, so her face loses all brightness as the first tear falls.

For Mag 139, thanks to Tess and Curtis Wilson Cost who painted the original image.
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38 comments:

  1. Anonymous15 October 2012 at 05:00

    Wow, unexpected ending. I first looked at the paining (by now I am finally expecting your wonderful artwork - rework, and thought within this example there are no dangers. Loved the story.

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  2. christopher15 October 2012 at 05:29

    Jinksy, you tell a good story. May I suggest, everything in the story leads to her seeing the painting in pride of place so many times. You do not need the word "first" because it probably isn't the first tear and if "first today" then you should say so.

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    1. Jinksy15 October 2012 at 08:55

      Very valid point, Christopher, thanks, but I've chosen to change their 'first' home to their 'new' home, thereby leaving it to the reader to choose how they interpret the ending - first tear, or first today. Actually, I think that is where the whole story leads, doesn't it?

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    2. Frances Garrood15 October 2012 at 16:34

      With respect to you both, I think the "first" is in exactly the right place! Liked this very much.

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    3. Susan Anderson17 October 2012 at 20:04

      I like the use of "first" as well. Just chiming in.

      =)

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  3. anthonynorth15 October 2012 at 08:30

    An excellent ending to this.

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  4. Berowne15 October 2012 at 10:49

    You've done something special, with both your image and text...

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  5. Daydreamer15 October 2012 at 11:02

    Aww...this grabs at the heart and leaves it pondering. Very effective. Love what you did with the pic.

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  6. Sueann15 October 2012 at 11:07

    Love what you did with the pic and your words quite moving!
    Spooky!!
    Hugs
    SueAnn

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  7. izzy15 October 2012 at 12:30

    Love the painting story- and your version of the house! It looks like water rushing, very cool.

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  8. Other Mary15 October 2012 at 13:19

    Oh, I wasn't expecting that...*sniff* Quite touching.

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  9. imac15 October 2012 at 13:19

    Very Moving post, love the pic and story of life.

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  10. Kathe W.15 October 2012 at 15:43

    I thought of that also-lovely sentiment and I like how you placed the home up in the mountains!

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  11. Helen15 October 2012 at 16:33

    I think it is so neat when folks have art work depicting their homes ... your poem illustrates how nice, how comforting it can be ...

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  12. Susie Clevenger15 October 2012 at 18:17

    This brings tears...love the new rendering of the photo, bringing light into it.

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  13. Kimolisa15 October 2012 at 18:25

    This is great insight into a couple's life and the ending brings tears to one's eyes.

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  14. Sherry Blue Sky15 October 2012 at 19:29

    Oh, so sad and poignant. Memories do bring tears, at our stage of life, dont they?The painting is absolutely beautiful.

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  15. Kay15 October 2012 at 20:18

    ..and time marches on.....sad but lovely.x

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  16. Ginny Brannan15 October 2012 at 20:21

    Lovely story. Impressive what you have done with the image, too!

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  17. Tess Kincaid15 October 2012 at 20:24

    Always a unique take, Jinksy...well done...

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  18. Laura15 October 2012 at 20:26

    oh, my heart feels full and empty all at once... beautiful.

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  19. Audrey Howitt aka Divalounger15 October 2012 at 21:32

    I didn't expect that ending--beautifully written piece

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  20. Anonymous15 October 2012 at 22:38

    This is truly touching. Beautifully written.

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  21. kaykuala16 October 2012 at 01:51

    This is a special one, both the verse and more so the image! The adapted image is so artistic, Jinsky! Keep at it!

    Hank

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  22. Unknown16 October 2012 at 02:33

    So much emotion here. So many stories that could be told from this introduction!

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  23. Margaret16 October 2012 at 03:46

    ...but what a precious gift... painted by his hand, because he loved her and their home. A treasure few have. Lovely.

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  24. Jim16 October 2012 at 05:14

    Nice theme, Jinksy, but really sad. That is the way I feel about my dog, Adi, when I see her pictures on my blog and elsewhere. She died a month ago. Today I threw the cover to her mattress away for the garbage man to pick up. I almost retrieved it before the garbage truck took it away.
    Adi was a very good dog (link), the best.
    ..

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  25. Abin Chakraborty16 October 2012 at 08:04

    sweet and sad. quite moving, within the brief compass.

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  26. Silent Otto 16 October 2012 at 13:41

    Perhaps her tear will fall to flood a planet , wrap it in ocean , and after milliions of years of evolution , oerhaps life will emerge from these salty deeps. !

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  27. Little Nell16 October 2012 at 17:05

    I really like this image, and as for the poignant tale it went straight to the heart.

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  28. Kay L. Davies16 October 2012 at 19:40

    Beautifully done, Jinksy. To say more would be superfluous after all the previous comments.
    K

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  29. Carrie Van Horn16 October 2012 at 20:08

    A touching write Jinksy!

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  30. Unknown16 October 2012 at 22:29

    Absolutely precious recollection. Creative and touching response to the photo prompt.

    http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2012/10/16/flowing-example/

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  31. Belva Rae Staples17 October 2012 at 01:12

    Very creative, sad, and haunting!

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  32. Anonymous17 October 2012 at 10:14

    beautifully written tale, Pen!
    ♥

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  33. Ella17 October 2012 at 12:09

    Pen, this is so sad, touching and beautiful~

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  34. Rick.Daddario17 October 2012 at 13:27

    aloha Jinksy - you've pointed out how the significance of a work can change emotionally over time for the viewer. in this case of course it is and emotional appreciation. i think it maybe able to change in other ways too. i have paintings that have changed for me in this way - emotionally, over time. i can appreciate them esthetically on one level - but the emotional appreciation has an equal if not higher value to me because of the emotional connection. i find this intriguing to think about. cool. thank you. aloha.

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  35. Susan Anderson17 October 2012 at 20:05

    A touching piece, Jinksy.

    =)

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