could be out-takes.
Bloopers? Cut!
What a mutt!
Did I fall into the trap
of meeting the wrong chap
in my teens,
saying goodby to dreams?
But times change.
We re-arrange
expectations and realise,
to our surprise,
life lead to 'now'!
Wow!
Beyond Mother Hen days, life starts again.
The feathered nest with no rest
transmutes to a time when 'us' and 'we'
shrinks to 'me', and I may at last fly...
Finally written today in response to Poetry Jam, but with IGWRT in mind, all along!
I love the idea of life leading to now - WOW. Also how the feathered nest eventually leads to the point in life when an individual himself/herself can FLY! That is another WOW, I think.
ReplyDeletesmiles...i agree with you on philosophy...everything both good and bad led to who i am now and i dont know that i want that to change...really like how you bring this around in that last stanza as well jinksy
ReplyDeleteWhat a great outlook on life! Love the rhyme and the progression through the changing philosophies we often develop as we get older (and hopefully wiser!)
ReplyDeleteYou have summed this up ~ perfectly!!!
ReplyDeleteYeah...I think thats exactly it....and to think so many of us get hung up on those past mistakes, sometimes to the point that the paralyze our present and future. Great message for this Tuesday morning. Loved it.
ReplyDeleteNice little flutter from you today my friend.
ReplyDeleteShake the feathers up and settle down again,lol.
Luvit.
neatly done.lively, humorous and very true.
ReplyDeleteYes indeed. We are who we become because of where we have been.
ReplyDeleteLovely thoughts :)
Your title made me think about the meaning of "swan song" and made me wonder where it came from--how these powerful big birds are connected with last chances or later chances. (Didn't really think of anything in response to that LOL.) I did enjoy the poem and yes, everything from our past has been involved in getting us where we are now.
ReplyDeleteI believe it's because legend has it that swans are mute until the moment of death, at which point it is reputed they find their voice!
DeleteThis describes my life pretty accurately. A splendid affirmation poem.
ReplyDeleteThis is a great idea, well worked out. The tense rhythms reflect life's tensions and sudden changes. May your swan song last long.
ReplyDeleteLove the title! and we really wouldn't dare change anything in our past if we could, would we? who knows where we might have ended up? great write!!!
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Very uplifting Jinksy! Especially love your ending--perfect!
ReplyDeleteNice one...yes, we re-arrange expectations and realize many things in the process. Loved your take on life.
ReplyDeleteOh you are singing my song. And it only took me 65 years to get to where it is "all about me" - hee hee!
ReplyDeleteAn interesting poetry format Pen. Unusual to me - Dave
ReplyDeletePerhaps I should lay claim to having invented it?! Then it could be called 'The Jinksy'! I can't say I've come across it anywhere else, although it's only rhyming couplets really, but with random length lines. I'd like to see other people giving it a go! If you do, Dave be sure to let me know? :)
DeleteNice...the philosophy here is worth.....I loved it...this has a different type of rhyming....
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