23 Jan 2011

Clarity

The mind reflects the stillness of calm water,
as it contemplates this mirrored image.
But this land is barren, and will give no quarter
to wildlife. Man made skylines will not damage

the artist's vision.  Forever it will remain
ideal, a proud example of an island state
rising like a mirage from some domain
which paints itself upon our screen. Fate

will deal with it kindly. It will never age,
captured as it is in pixels. Machine and man
have created a Nirvana of the Space Age
which exists in no-mans-land. It can

however, be a stepping stone between
our world and another, which waits unseen...

This is in response to The Writer's Island Prompt #4 for 2011

23 comments:

  1. How brilliant - "It will never age,/captured as it is in pixels..."

    I love the way you find the words to express your thoughts.

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  2. Wow Jinksy! Incredible sonnet. And the voice is so assured. Bravo!

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  3. I love this very thought provoking poem. :O)

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  4. Brilliant, loved the last two lines.

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  5. Brilliant sonnet: I love where it took me,specially 'captured in pixels.' Definitely publishable - try 14 magazine.

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  6. Excellent --- --- well crafted and it had a powerful finish.

    joanny

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  7. I agree with the other commenters, this is a terrific poem, and one I'm going to be thinking about all day! Thanks so much for sharing your talent with us!

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  8. Sombre and thought-provoking.

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  9. This is really beautiful poem, loved it :)
    All the best
    Marinela x

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  10. Wow, this is such a beautiful post, your words and this photo, pure Magic.

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  11. Wow... I love this, you have touched the elements with pure clarity!

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  12. The poem is splendid. I fel in love with this line ""Man made skylines will not damage its pristine silhouette." I like how along with the image I could see a place where it would be impossible to build and block the view. A lovely poem indeed. xoxo Nith

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  13. Wonderfully written! Especially love "fate will deal with it kindly."

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  14. Clarity... we each have such different takes, don't we. That is part of the wonder of this poetry community. Here are my takes:
    http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2011/01/22/clarity-2/

    http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2010/12/07/just-rewards/

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  15. So nicely done Jinksy, I enjoyed reading.

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  16. Jinksy, beautifully written with
    a profound message.

    Pamela

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  17. Jinksy,
    Very nice images came to mind when reading your, nicely crafted words.

    Best wishes, Eileen

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  18. This one has me deep in thought. Beautiful words.

    My Poetry Pantry poems: The Likido Diet, Mood Rings of the Future, and Smiley Sociology Study #3 – Time Travel (a link exchange / writing prompt).

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  19. Welcome Join Jingle Poetry Potluck week 21,
    Feel free to share 1 to 3 old poems or random poems, cheers.

    Love your talent demonstrated here,
    Hope to see you share.
    xxx

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