18 Aug 2013

Adrift In Dreams


In the moment sleep envelops bodies,
causing them to plummet into night,
floating shapes of random jigsaw pictures
begin to infiltrate the inner sight.
Like boats adrift in dreams sans map or compass,
the journey's never under our control,
for darkness leads all where it will till morning
when daylight lays its claim upon the soul.

Thanks for the inspiration go to Tess and Elena Kalis at The Mag 182.
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24 comments:

  1. Kathe W.18 August 2013 at 15:42

    the image is like sleeping and dreaming- I did not see that til reading your poem. Lovely!

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  2. Helen18 August 2013 at 17:28

    She needs some good REM sleep! :-)

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  3. Doctor FTSE18 August 2013 at 17:43

    Very good. Well constructed rhymed poem.

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  4. Anonymous18 August 2013 at 18:51

    well done, great ending

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  5. Berowne18 August 2013 at 19:36

    Stylishly creative; a treat.

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  6. Tess Kincaid18 August 2013 at 21:59

    Haunting and lovely...

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  7. steveroni19 August 2013 at 01:42

    Sounds like, "AND TO ALL A GOOD NIGHT...but don't let the bedbugs bite", Jinksy.
    I like "darkness and light"--opposites which attract one another.

    PEACE!

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  8. Magaly Guerrero19 August 2013 at 02:37

    I love the idea of "daylight [laying] its claim upon the soul." We always hear of the night doing that and confusing everything. It's nice to see from a different angle...

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  9. humbird19 August 2013 at 03:26

    Responsibilities of soul...like imagery here...cool pic too

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  10. Wayne Pitchko19 August 2013 at 04:43

    well done.....thanks for sharing this

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  11. Anonymous19 August 2013 at 10:02

    Perfect poem. So true:)

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  12. JBinford-Bell19 August 2013 at 19:09

    Wonderful. Adrift in dreams brought by the night

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  13. Helena19 August 2013 at 22:14

    Deliciously, darkly deep this week. Love what you've done with the picture - and I like how you take time out to edit them!

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  14. Truedessa20 August 2013 at 01:40

    This is creative and dark..adrift in dreams..will they find their way..

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  15. Anonymous20 August 2013 at 07:06

    I love what you have done with the picture =) Dark and beautiful!

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  16. Unknown20 August 2013 at 12:26

    Whoa, I am really impressed with what you did with the image, and the stuff you wrote wasn't bad, neither. (LOL?)

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  17. Mrs.Trellis20 August 2013 at 17:41

    You write beautifully - lie two or three people rolled into one.

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  18. Ginny Brannan20 August 2013 at 17:44

    "the journey's never under our control,
    for darkness leads all where it will till morning
    when daylight lays its claim upon the soul."

    Beautifully captured. It seems we both were inspired by dreams this week!

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  19. Lucy Westenra20 August 2013 at 21:15

    Well observed. And I like how you set up the image to suit your poem.

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  20. Silent Otto 21 August 2013 at 16:38

    I like sailmg aboard your ship, Captain Sparrow ....

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  21. Lolamouse23 August 2013 at 15:26

    This photo does, indeed, bring to mind dreams. A dreamy poem, to be sure!

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  22. Little Nell24 August 2013 at 15:06

    Floating shapes of random jigsaw pictures - exactly!

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  23. ~T~27 August 2013 at 03:03

    There are some weird islands out there on the sea of dreams! Very nice.

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