underline your absence,
leave a vapour trail of emotion
across a sky where stars, this day,
are hidden.
Love has been eclipsed
by a black moon,
and the chill of outer space
invades my universe.
Written for the Mag 146, thanks to Tess and Man Ray's Object to be Destroyed.
This has impact. I feel it in the belly like the beat of a bass drum.
ReplyDeleteAww.... sad to think of love ...gone.
ReplyDeleteA rocket ship lost in space.
ReplyDeleteNice... I especially like the last four lines.
ReplyDeleteI liked this a bunch--such an emotional piece!
ReplyDeleteAWESOME! Very powerful.
ReplyDeleteThis is quite sad. I like the way it recedes . . vapour trails, sky, moon, outerspace, Universe . . . well constructed.
ReplyDeleteWow, this is so good. I love your first two lines.
ReplyDeleteThis roams to so many places. Nice one.
ReplyDeleteAwfully well done, but that's to be expected, Jinksy.
ReplyDeleteHow clever you are to alter picture and bring to life a whole new perspective, a whole new prompt. Wonderful Magpie!
ReplyDeleteExcellent - love the space and distance that you produced here.
ReplyDeleteUnexpected and Lovely.
ReplyDeleteYes good one! deep space-
ReplyDeletenicely done ....really like the last lines
ReplyDeleteLove how you altered the image...so cool!
ReplyDeleteHugs
SueAnn
Real cool my friend.
ReplyDeleteVery nice /// you have a wonderful way of transforming the image, writing to it.
ReplyDeleteEvocative...brr...
ReplyDeleteWhat a different take while still being true to the picture! Awesome write.
ReplyDeleteWonderful metaphor Jinksy. I especially like the '...vapour trail of emotion
ReplyDeleteacross a sky where stars, this day,
are hidden.'
Sad, but a beautiful write indeed!!
ReplyDeleteLovely poem and I love what you've done with the image!
ReplyDeleteAw, that's so sad and lonely.
ReplyDeleteFlash 55 - Wanted: Dead or Alive?
That is impossible! :-) Either the dark universe is lighted up by the stars and the moon or the universe is hidden behind the skies. :-) God is not mysterious. :-)
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