Sunday, December 2

Left On The Shelf

Two abandoned rings
underline your absence,
leave a vapour trail of emotion
across a sky where stars, this day,
are hidden.
Love has been eclipsed
by a black moon,
and the chill of outer space
invades my universe.



Written for the Mag 146, thanks to Tess and  Man Ray's Object to be Destroyed.

26 comments:

  1. This has impact. I feel it in the belly like the beat of a bass drum.

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  2. Awh, and yet they are glittering objects NOT destroyed by love gone nova!

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  3. Aww.... sad to think of love ...gone.

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  4. Nice... I especially like the last four lines.

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  5. I liked this a bunch--such an emotional piece!

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  6. This is quite sad. I like the way it recedes . . vapour trails, sky, moon, outerspace, Universe . . . well constructed.

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  7. Wow, this is so good. I love your first two lines.

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  8. This roams to so many places. Nice one.

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  9. Awfully well done, but that's to be expected, Jinksy.

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  10. How clever you are to alter picture and bring to life a whole new perspective, a whole new prompt. Wonderful Magpie!

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  11. Excellent - love the space and distance that you produced here.

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  12. nicely done ....really like the last lines

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  13. Love how you altered the image...so cool!
    Hugs
    SueAnn

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  14. Very nice /// you have a wonderful way of transforming the image, writing to it.

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  15. What a different take while still being true to the picture! Awesome write.

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  16. Wonderful metaphor Jinksy. I especially like the '...vapour trail of emotion
    across a sky where stars, this day,
    are hidden.'

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  17. Sad, but a beautiful write indeed!!

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  18. Lovely poem and I love what you've done with the image!

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  19. That is impossible! :-) Either the dark universe is lighted up by the stars and the moon or the universe is hidden behind the skies. :-) God is not mysterious. :-)

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