18 Aug 2013

Adrift In Dreams


In the moment sleep envelops bodies,
causing them to plummet into night,
floating shapes of random jigsaw pictures
begin to infiltrate the inner sight.
Like boats adrift in dreams sans map or compass,
the journey's never under our control,
for darkness leads all where it will till morning
when daylight lays its claim upon the soul.

Thanks for the inspiration go to Tess and Elena Kalis at The Mag 182.

24 comments:

  1. the image is like sleeping and dreaming- I did not see that til reading your poem. Lovely!

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  2. She needs some good REM sleep! :-)

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  3. Very good. Well constructed rhymed poem.

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  4. well done, great ending

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  5. Stylishly creative; a treat.

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  6. Sounds like, "AND TO ALL A GOOD NIGHT...but don't let the bedbugs bite", Jinksy.
    I like "darkness and light"--opposites which attract one another.

    PEACE!

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  7. I love the idea of "daylight [laying] its claim upon the soul." We always hear of the night doing that and confusing everything. It's nice to see from a different angle...

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  8. Responsibilities of soul...like imagery here...cool pic too

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  9. well done.....thanks for sharing this

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  10. Perfect poem. So true:)

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  11. Wonderful. Adrift in dreams brought by the night

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  12. Deliciously, darkly deep this week. Love what you've done with the picture - and I like how you take time out to edit them!

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  13. This is creative and dark..adrift in dreams..will they find their way..

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  14. I love what you have done with the picture =) Dark and beautiful!

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  15. Whoa, I am really impressed with what you did with the image, and the stuff you wrote wasn't bad, neither. (LOL?)

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  16. You write beautifully - lie two or three people rolled into one.

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  17. "the journey's never under our control,
    for darkness leads all where it will till morning
    when daylight lays its claim upon the soul."

    Beautifully captured. It seems we both were inspired by dreams this week!

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  18. Well observed. And I like how you set up the image to suit your poem.

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  19. I like sailmg aboard your ship, Captain Sparrow ....

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  20. This photo does, indeed, bring to mind dreams. A dreamy poem, to be sure!

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  21. Floating shapes of random jigsaw pictures - exactly!

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  22. There are some weird islands out there on the sea of dreams! Very nice.

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