Sunday, October 14

Remembering

He had done the painting of their new home soon after they married. It was to be her birthday gift; a gift that would acquire more importance as their time together stretched into the future, strengthening bonds.
She adored it, hung it in pride of place over the mantel. A day never passed without her smiling as she glanced towards the familiar image and remembered...

Now, she remembers when he was alive, and as shadows dim sunlight, so her face loses all brightness as the first tear falls.

For Mag 139, thanks to Tess and Curtis Wilson Cost who painted the original image.

39 comments:

  1. Wow, unexpected ending. I first looked at the paining (by now I am finally expecting your wonderful artwork - rework, and thought within this example there are no dangers. Loved the story.

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  2. Jinksy, you tell a good story. May I suggest, everything in the story leads to her seeing the painting in pride of place so many times. You do not need the word "first" because it probably isn't the first tear and if "first today" then you should say so.

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    1. Very valid point, Christopher, thanks, but I've chosen to change their 'first' home to their 'new' home, thereby leaving it to the reader to choose how they interpret the ending - first tear, or first today. Actually, I think that is where the whole story leads, doesn't it?

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    2. With respect to you both, I think the "first" is in exactly the right place! Liked this very much.

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    3. I like the use of "first" as well. Just chiming in.

      =)

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  3. You've done something special, with both your image and text...

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  4. Aww...this grabs at the heart and leaves it pondering. Very effective. Love what you did with the pic.

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  5. Love what you did with the pic and your words quite moving!
    Spooky!!
    Hugs
    SueAnn

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  6. Love the painting story- and your version of the house! It looks like water rushing, very cool.

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  7. Oh, I wasn't expecting that...*sniff* Quite touching.

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  8. Very Moving post, love the pic and story of life.

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  9. I thought of that also-lovely sentiment and I like how you placed the home up in the mountains!

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  10. I think it is so neat when folks have art work depicting their homes ... your poem illustrates how nice, how comforting it can be ...

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  11. This brings tears...love the new rendering of the photo, bringing light into it.

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  12. This is great insight into a couple's life and the ending brings tears to one's eyes.

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  13. Oh, so sad and poignant. Memories do bring tears, at our stage of life, dont they?The painting is absolutely beautiful.

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  14. ..and time marches on.....sad but lovely.x

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  15. Lovely story. Impressive what you have done with the image, too!

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  16. Always a unique take, Jinksy...well done...

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  17. oh, my heart feels full and empty all at once... beautiful.

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  18. I didn't expect that ending--beautifully written piece

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  19. This is truly touching. Beautifully written.

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  20. This is a special one, both the verse and more so the image! The adapted image is so artistic, Jinsky! Keep at it!

    Hank

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  21. So much emotion here. So many stories that could be told from this introduction!

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  22. ...but what a precious gift... painted by his hand, because he loved her and their home. A treasure few have. Lovely.

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  23. Nice theme, Jinksy, but really sad. That is the way I feel about my dog, Adi, when I see her pictures on my blog and elsewhere. She died a month ago. Today I threw the cover to her mattress away for the garbage man to pick up. I almost retrieved it before the garbage truck took it away.
    Adi was a very good dog (link), the best.
    ..

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  24. sweet and sad. quite moving, within the brief compass.

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  25. Perhaps her tear will fall to flood a planet , wrap it in ocean , and after milliions of years of evolution , oerhaps life will emerge from these salty deeps. !

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  26. I really like this image, and as for the poignant tale it went straight to the heart.

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  27. Oh I had a feeling this was going to end sadly sine you titled it "Remembering." Isn't it interesting how when experiencing a loss, we tend to remember moments from the past, happy or sad. It sure brings an appreciation for enjoying life and loved ones all the more each day, each moment. Life is precious. Thank you for sharing. :) Visiting from Real Toads.

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  28. Beautifully done, Jinksy. To say more would be superfluous after all the previous comments.
    K

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  29. Absolutely precious recollection. Creative and touching response to the photo prompt.

    http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2012/10/16/flowing-example/

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  30. Pen, this is so sad, touching and beautiful~

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  31. aloha Jinksy - you've pointed out how the significance of a work can change emotionally over time for the viewer. in this case of course it is and emotional appreciation. i think it maybe able to change in other ways too. i have paintings that have changed for me in this way - emotionally, over time. i can appreciate them esthetically on one level - but the emotional appreciation has an equal if not higher value to me because of the emotional connection. i find this intriguing to think about. cool. thank you. aloha.

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  32. A touching piece, Jinksy.

    =)

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