Sunday, February 12

Drowned


Carried on the rising tide of night
flotillas of persistent dreams set sail,
while whirlpools circumnavigate my mind,
attempt to drown it. I pray for quiet sleep
to steer a course towards a harbour's calm
waters. But all the while I hear the cries
of ancient nightmares sinking down towards
night's ocean bed, biding time to resurface...                                                              
Written for The Mag
 Ebony bodies
intertwine in a sculpture
carved from the darkness

40 comments:

  1. Very thoughtful take. One can feel the swirling eddy.

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  2. Oh, so fitting! I like the way you tweaked the image too.

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  3. And like Other Mary I also wanted to compliment the image-tweaking!!! Beautiful words too, of course (I especially like the final bit about ebony bodies)! *smile* Gorgeous!

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  4. Especially loved "ebony bodies"! A great image.

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  5. The water one will haunt me in my dreams ;-)

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  6. I love what you did with the image, taking out the black and white creates an entirely different train of thought, focusing on the human element. I didn't do that. I like it that you did. DROWNED takes me back to the image of a few weeks ago. Good closing!

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  7. I salute you and your ever constant uniqueness! I love it.

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  8. Ah, disturbed nights . . . what's the remedy?

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  10. Let's try that again -- not sure which I liked best! I loved the image of drowning, and the way you tweaked the original photo was perfect. I also really like the idea of "ebony bodies . . . carved from the darkness"
    Well done!

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  11. But all the while I hear the cries
    of ancient nightmares sinking down towards
    the ocean bed, biding time to resurface...

    dang i love the ominous feeling that give...marvelous mag jinksy

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  12. Ooo, I sort of dark ladder's descent - scary dreams!

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  13. I love how you modify the pictures... pick out something unique and different from them. Enjoyed this, Jinksy!

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  14. I loved your analogy of "disturbing dreams" linked to images of being tossed on "the rising tide of night". I attempted an analogy of paint to chocolate, but I don't know if it was as successful. Thank you for sharing this Jinksy.

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  15. I'm liking the metaphores of water very much Jinksy...great poem!

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  16. Fantastic! Your blue is creative but a bit creepy...truth to tell a lot more than a bit. Your dark rendering is perfect! My exact reaction to the photo. Evil. I can't touch this one.

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  17. Very good Pen. I liked the top picture and poem - Dave

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  18. The very thought of drowning is so powerful. As are your words. I love what you did with the photo!! So cool! Totally changes the feel!
    Hugs
    SUeAnn

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  19. Brilliant poem!!! I love the alliteration throughout and the are freaky. They'll give me nightmares tonight :)

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    1. ...oops, left a word out..."the photos are freaky".

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    2. Yup I am glad for the hope of floating-sleep and peace.

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  20. Nightmarish depths, beautifully composed Jinksy.

    Isabel x

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  21. That second piece is exquisite!

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  22. The cries of ancient nightmares--lasting and powerful. I love both pieces, Jinksy. Excellent stuff!

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  23. really like where you went with this....nicely done

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  24. "The cries of ancient nightmares"...so many layers arise from a deep place..

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  25. Some careful thought and effort went into this piece. May you be granted that quiet sleep.

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  26. Cracking words. I enjoyed the depth of them.

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  27. the altered imagery is paired so well with your words.

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  28. I love what you did with the image ... the bodies surrounding the beauty are as intriguing as she is!

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  29. Sheez! I think you have been reading my mind and making poetry out of it! Well done!

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  30. Fabulous poem, but you might feel better if you drank no coffee and ate no cooked cheese late at night!

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  31. Haunting!! Gosh... these memories can be sooo nagging at times!
    A wonderful way of describing that, Jinksy...

    And I loooooove what you did with the image! Totally Cool !

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  32. Clever twist on the image, Jinsky. The verse is equally beautiful!

    Hank

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  33. Your first poem gives voice to the fears of those with frequent night terror.

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