22 Feb 2011

Magpie Tales # 54


Relentless power
of water engulfs humans.
Floods pay them no heed.

Their lungs cannot breathe
oxygenated bubbles
formed by the maelstrom.

Instead, these droplets
create thunder in our ears,
as their sounds combine.

Souls of water sprites
are drawn into the torrent
but remain silent.


Once I saw Willow's picture turned into the negative, it inspired  me to write this set of multiple haiku. For more pieces of the jigsaw. visit others at Magpie Tales.

18 comments:

  1. Souls of water sprites/are drawn into the torrent/but remain silent...thats perfect! And I love what you did with the image.

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  2. You have both the eye and skill of a poet, Jinksy. Nicely done!

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  3. What a wonder you have created my friend.

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  4. Fabulous poem, and I love the final stanza. Plus you are just getting too good at these images!

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  5. Oh my! Four haiku stanzas ~ be still my heart. The negative image is very, very clever.

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  6. "Floods pay them no heed."

    You are the haiku queen.

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  7. Really meaningful, beautiful pieces...

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  8. I am not a fan of haiku but you make it so readable. It doesn't stand out and scream "I am a haiku!" it just flows along, much like it's subject.

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  9. Surely the negative of this image worked in a positive fashion - nice piece!

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  10. Made me think of the tsunami of a few years ago in South Asia. Wonderful use of the prompt, and the color matches the poem perfectly.

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  11. For some reason this made me think of my mother. I am tearful but that is okay its only been two months. Your poem is beautiful.

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  12. Yes, it doesn't take much more imagination to see the drowned bodies!

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  13. Your image does look very much like water. Well done, Jinksy.

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  14. That was a remarkably well written haiku set, Jinksy... And I really love how you "bluezed" the magpie image to suit the flowing words here... really creative!! And beautiful!

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  15. I love what you've done with the Magpie puzzle-Great!

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  16. You've done wonders with the image and yes, I thought tsunami as well.

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